World Domination

Written by kieren21 / MA: Mature Audiences - Adult / 7.25 (4 ratings) (4)
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apotheosis
apotheosis		 Aug 16, 2006
Personally I did not find it boring at all, I really liked it. If you were to play out all the loose ends until they finished and develop the story more it would be 9 or 10 worthy.
by apotheosis on Aug 16, 2006
donteatpoop
donteatpoop		 May 13, 2006
I found this story extremely boring. You described things well and everything, but the entertainment value was seriously missing. I don't even know how to help advise you to make this story interesting, so my advice to you is to choose another subject matter and try again.
by donteatpoop on May 13, 2006
GunshySlycat1
GunshySlycat1		 Apr 30, 2006
Interesting lil' story that reminded me of another one.
by GunshySlycat1 on Apr 30, 2006
YazZMaN
YazZMaN		 Jul 12, 2005
It's defenitely one of those "proffesionaly made" stories. It has a lot of writing and the pictures made it more interesting (thank God). But making the story look good and having a good writing style alone will get you no place. You have to make the plot more exciting... I mean, I ended up gambling on a football team my first time and that was it. The key element to making good stories is an original plot and new ideas. Be more creative and you'll be a great writer.
by YazZMaN on Jul 12, 2005

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