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The demon scam

Written by Aki / NR: Not Rated /

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Comments & Ratings

Author	Rating	Date	Comment
SteveFreeling		Jan 15, 2014	by SteveFreeling on Jan 15, 2014
Vreen		Feb 20, 2012	Just as it was getting good ran out of story, still its well thought out and already awesome, please finish it soon. by Vreen on Feb 20, 2012
TheCandyMan		Oct 15, 2011	I was very impressed by what I just read. The letter system was a little off-putting but I think it was a nice idea, the plot wasn't exactly the best of ideas, but I enjoyed it nevertheless, though short. I encountered a few too many typos throughout the story, but that is forgiveable. If I gave you an even lower rating I don't think I'd be able to sleep tonight, If I give you a higher rating, well, I'd be a little too easy to entertain. Easy to read, nice and simple, coherent, but needs to be contstructed a little better. That is all. by TheCandyMan on Oct 15, 2011
TheCandyMan		Oct 15, 2011	I was very impressed by what I just read. The letter system was a little off-putting but I think it was a nice idea, the plot wasn't exactly the best of ideas, but I enjoyed it nevertheless, though short. If I gave you an even lower rating I don't think I'd be able to sleep tonight, If I give you a higher rating, well, I'd be a little too easy to entertain. Easy to read, nice and simple, coherent, but needs to be contstructed a little better. That is all. by TheCandyMan on Oct 15, 2011
Crefix		Nov 28, 2010	by Crefix on Nov 28, 2010
titus337		Nov 9, 2010	More Please! by titus337 on Nov 9, 2010
Matabichos		Feb 27, 2008	by Matabichos on Feb 27, 2008
meteomage		Dec 12, 2007	I really liked this story. I think the numbers and letters system is really good if you are able to fix it. I really hope you finish this story. by meteomage on Dec 12, 2007
apotheosis		Mar 17, 2007	I'll break it down. Started you off with a ten. -1- I encountered a few loose ends. -1- The letter system was a bit annoying at times. -2- The plot didn't really grab me. +1- Room count +1- Word count +1- Effort 10 - 4 + 3 = 9 I can do math. by apotheosis on Mar 17, 2007
Drewc91		Nov 20, 2006	by Drewc91 on Nov 20, 2006
Drewc91		Nov 20, 2006	I am very impressed by this story and I even like the letter system. I hope you finish it soon and great job! by Drewc91 on Nov 20, 2006
tanasdapsycho		Jul 10, 2006	The story itself was good, but the number and letter system was a little screwy. For example, I would get to a part and it would ask me what letter I had when I didn't have any of the letters, or it would tell me to trade certain letters for other letters and I wouldn't have any of the letters needed for the trade. That about sums up what I think about it. 4 out of 5 and 8 out of 10. by tanasdapsycho on Jul 10, 2006
Aki		Mar 7, 2006	This story is based on a letter system rather than asking questions like "Did you get hurt?" or "Did you meet this or that person?" in the choices. This is because I think such questions could be spoilers, especially if you want to play again and take a diffent path. The letter are "neutral" so it's not that easy to know what they stand for, and that is after all the point. But I do realize that it might look a bit unpersonal and that it could be difficult to keep track off. This is a minus that I am willing to deal with though. On the plus side, it means I have to make less rooms, which is a must when you are dealing with several hundred of rooms and over a thousand choices. Anyway, to the letters. Some of them can be changed during the course of the story, depending on what actions you make, and some of them (the letters I and J in particular) can NOT change, even if you first get an I and then later a J. Your letter will STILL be J. But this is marked especially in the story, so don't worry about it. by Aki on Mar 7, 2006
ShannonK		Mar 7, 2006	I like it! Somehow I died really quickly the first time (I have a bad habit of picking the WRONG choices first), but after that I got to actually experience a good chunk of the story. I can't wait to see what you do with it. GOOD JOB! However, due to the disclaimer, I thought I'd just be able to remember the letters and numbers. I didn't anticipate having to write them down until I was faced with remembering 4 at a time while reading. Didn't matter much, I guess. I found some paper after all. I like it! by ShannonK on Mar 7, 2006
jeffisthebest		Mar 3, 2006	Excellent story! I don't know I got this far with 35, just like Cat's Final Quest II. Your story starts out slow but becomes very engaging. Likewise, I thought the remembering letters was stupid at first but near the end I realized how genius it was. by jeffisthebest on Mar 3, 2006
YazZMaN		Mar 3, 2006	ChubTub's thoughts were mine exactly. by YazZMaN on Mar 3, 2006
Cat2000		Mar 3, 2006	Apart from the comment I already made about perhaps making the first few rooms a little longer, I can't see anything else that needs improving, so far, at least. I do think this is interesting so far - it's certainly caught my attention. I look forward to reading more as you update ^^ by Cat2000 on Mar 3, 2006
ChubbyTeletubby		Mar 3, 2006	A little nagging voice in my head (the same one that tells me to hurt small animals) is saying that I should give you a 7. But I'm going to give you an 8. This story has a lot of potential if you polish it up a bit. As it stands now I'd say it's worthy of a 7, however. But I have faith in you, and I have a feeling by the time you're finished with your work here it will be worth an 8 or higher. by ChubbyTeletubby on Mar 3, 2006