dinner

Written by popem / NR: Not Rated /

(9)

Comments & Ratings

Author	Rating	Date	Comment
justbeingme		Jun 7, 2012	you can never win by justbeingme on Jun 7, 2012
TheCandyMan		Sep 24, 2011	Hmm...Well, it appears to lack in description, detail, and I'm not too fond of complete, and utter randomness. Unless you're in a conversation with someone, you never, ever, ever, ever, ever, ever, ever, ever, ever - ever...Ever...I mean, you just never start a sentence with the word 'Ok.' You got that? by TheCandyMan on Sep 24, 2011
TheCandyMan		May 11, 2011	What the hell?? by TheCandyMan on May 11, 2011
magic		Jan 24, 2011	very bad, random, doesn't make sense, and stupid (also kind of violent for a not rated story) by magic on Jan 24, 2011
writer22		Oct 31, 2006	hmmmm... i dont know what to say its funny but kinnda i dont know silly. by writer22 on Oct 31, 2006
Dan2		Oct 24, 2006	...Whatever by Dan2 on Oct 24, 2006
apotheosis		Sep 14, 2006	It invovled lots of death which is always nice but I thought it was overall not a very well put together on story. It could have been put together a lot better with more description, better grammar, more rooms, a bit more original plot line thrown in and just a bit more meat to it all together. by apotheosis on Sep 14, 2006
YazZMaN		Dec 26, 2005	This is your first story that I know of and besides, I had fun choking on a pea. Your story needs a lot more descrition and it also needs to be a lot longer but those are things that usually come with time. Plus there are a lot of grammar errors... keep this story away from Michalerayholt. by YazZMaN on Dec 26, 2005
donteatpoop		Dec 26, 2005	Not bad for a first story. The rooms were wicked short with very little description, but that goes hand in hand with the simplicity of the plot line. By the way, I now have an overwhelming fear of eating. Way to go. I'm fat. How am I supposed to go on without eating? by donteatpoop on Dec 26, 2005
jeffisthebest		Nov 26, 2005	First of all, the word is heimlich. Or maybe hiemlich. Anyway, I'm not sure this is a true 7, but I had a lot of fun reading it. There's so many ways you can die eating dinner...it's safer to be in a plane with a Muslim than eating some pizza... by jeffisthebest on Nov 26, 2005