Much of Nothing

Written by donteatpoop / R: Restricted - Adult /

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Comments & Ratings

Author	Rating	Date	Comment
donteatpoop		Jun 11, 2014	Found an old email from YazZMaN about this story: What I disliked: 1. I don't like the overall idea, but since this is something which for any story depends largely on the point of view of the reader and is impossible to change anyways it's not a big deal. (The only reason I don't like it is because I feel like your writing about my town :() 2. I thought the end was "much of nothing" which I guess means in a sense, it achieved it's goal. Seriously though, I would like to see more adventure here and was disapointed with the end to that one pathway because it WAS a good story. What I liked: 1. Superior descriptions and writing. 2. The characters are very, very, real. Especially Dan. (I would know) 3. The situations are very, very, real. Except for everyone automatically turning to you to make the decisions, but the damn choices had to get in there somehow huh? 4. Dan was one fucking funny fat-assed repulsive bastard. Summed up: The story basicaly sticks to a very real town and is very realistic which in some ways is a good thing (people can relate to it and it dosn't get to far-fetched) but in some ways is a bad thing (I got bored with the lack of adventure and/or action [not including the crazy-ass-siemen-squirting-rock-fucking climax of the story]) So overall it's great. I would give it an 8-9 if I were to rate it based on what I read. I just thing it needs more adventure. Maybe the group ends up broken down in a ghetto? Maybe the car gets hijacked? Maybe the cops try to bust them and Teri pulls a gun out of her car and they go on a fucking awesome high-speed car chase? Pretty good. I liked it. Defenitly unique. by donteatpoop on Jun 11, 2014
TheCandyMan		Jul 27, 2011	Great writing DEP. But I was really expecting a little more of you, I mean, you only get one choice per room, but even that practically satisfied me, who doesn't want to fuck the extremely fuck-able? But she goes to jail..? But hey, we're reviewing the writing style, grammar and spelling here, are we not? Or am I mistaken? Either way, you made a few spelling mistakes, the grammar was perfect, and your writing technique is just amazing. I enjoyed this thoroughly..Which is indeed, very new. by TheCandyMan on Jul 27, 2011
chosenone		May 4, 2010	Good story. I dont think it deserves a 10, but it sure doesnt deserve a 1 like the rater before me gave you so...10! by chosenone on May 4, 2010
vancelandow		Mar 20, 2009	by vancelandow on Mar 20, 2009
Calen		Jan 22, 2008	Please finish it! And have an ending where she doesn't go to jail, I like her. >_< by Calen on Jan 22, 2008
EndMaster		Mar 20, 2007	You should work on this story some more. I'd like to see where the other branches would lead. by EndMaster on Mar 20, 2007
apotheosis		Sep 22, 2006	I really liked it. It was well written and actually held my attention which very few of the stories on this site are able to do. I wish you had finished it or at least added on more but what you did have is gold so I'm going to give it a 10. by apotheosis on Sep 22, 2006
jeffisthebest		Jun 14, 2006	You ruin a whole generation of young children with this story. Besides, why can we only go west? I want to go to the tunnels. But not really. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Anyway, the main thing with this story, is that its well-written but reflects its title. There you go. 8. by jeffisthebest on Jun 14, 2006
ChubbyTeletubby		Jun 10, 2006	Exquisite. This story has a special spot in my heart. Nuff said. by ChubbyTeletubby on Jun 10, 2006
donteatpoop		Jun 10, 2006	Just like everything written by donteatpoop to date, this gets a ten from me. by donteatpoop on Jun 10, 2006