Comments & Ratings
|Way too many loose ends|
|Sooooo msny loose ends....|
|They're right. The potential is there, but you definitely got lazy with this one.|
|To many loose ends and relatively short rooms earned the minus 4. Everything else was alright. Defenitely a lot of potential with this story|
I am sorry because I know you put effort in this, but there are too many loose ends.|
Plus, Doctor Who commercials are on all the time during Simpsons they piss me off. I bet you're from Canada.
|The potential is there, but the rooms could use more description. Making a choice, especialy in sci-fi, with only one sentence having been read is like shooting your enemy in the dark. Describe things and consider combining rooms and describing what's going on so that the reader can make a logical choice. Keep writing though. I just recommend going over what you have written and using the edit button to improve it.|