Comments & Ratings
|This is totally awesome. One of the best fantasy stories on the site.|
|Great to read while listening to Blind Guardians acoustic version of "War of the thrones."|
|Well thanks, and glad to see that you didn't commit suicide after reading it, like the other reader apparently did. Lol.|
Glad you liked the story. Lol.|
This is probably a bit late, since I only just now checked this (You should've posted this comment with the rating section) but why the fuck would you continue to read something that obviously upset you so much?
There can only be three conclusions:
an emo masochist.
Your dysfunctions aside, this story is actually a parallel story to Necromancer, so if you read that, you'd understand why this story is the way it is. Plus this story was for a "From Hell" contest so again, there was supposed to be hopelessness and dispair in it.
Anyway, your emo rant about me being evil was entertaining so thanks for amusing me. This was a nice surprise.
And really what the hell would've been so bad about Sauron winning? Burn those fucking hobbit homes and elven forests to the ground I say!
|BTW, my nickname is drevenhaug so feel free to write me a response :-(|
OMG dude!!!! How could you not make a good ending, not a single one?! Do you know how depressed I feel right now? You are sick!!! YOU are the lich king. I'we read through every bad ending on purpose hoping and wishing that I'd end up with the good one, where the world gets saved and he gets together with the female general or something.|
OMG OMG OMFG!!!
What have you done? You are evil!!! AAAARGGHH!!! I feel like crying right now. This is horrible.
To be honest, I have always felt that it's kitchy to make good endings in stories but now I realized that it isn't. Hoping for the good is my nature, humans' nature, SENTIENT BEINGS' NATURE!!! What the fuck has happened to your nature?!?!?!
How would a book like LOTR or Narnia or whatever feel if it had a horrible ending? It would feel horrible. Well, that's how your story feels, horrible. I feel empty and disillusioned and like I've totally wasted my time, I've been tricked and used. I suffered through all that gory, violent, cruel, sad shit that happened to the character (me in a way) and I got nothing for it. Makes me wanna kill myself right now.
Fuck you man!
|Fuck errors and typo's, this was an excellent story and you deserve nothing less than a ten for your efforts.|
Overall, this was quite an enjoyable read. I took the time to carefully go through the entire story and found that by the end I was completely engrossed. |
I have a couple critiques, however. First of all, the overall writing quality suffers from too many typographical errors and a little bit of sloppiness with paragraph breaks, quotations, etc. You are too good a writer to be letting these things slide.
Secondly, and this is not so much a problem with the story itself as a suggestion for the future: I think that the military-campaign-type story has become a bit too formulaic for you. You've done it before, on multiple occasions. You've always executed it well, but I am really anxious to see something from you that is completely new, both thematically and stylistically.
The linearity of the story didn't really bother me since too many branches can quickly lead to a story's downfall. The lute worked very well as a plot device and much-needed counterpoint to all the violence, gore, hopelessness and mayhem. I must also commend you for capturing the essence of "from Hell" so very completely in this harrowing apocalyptic nightmare you have created.
It's the end of the world as we know it, but at least you can still play [i]Greensleeves[/i].
|I have one question for you. Why are you so skilled at writing these? Are you some kind of super human author or something? Tell me, because this story and Necromancer are two of the most awesome stories I've ever read, in my entire lifetime. You have one hell of a gift, my friend.|
It's a damn good story, End. At par with Necromancer... I think I even liked it a bit more. Encountering some of the family from Necromancer was a nice touch too, and the "letters" added a bit of flare as well.|
On the negative side, there were quite a bit of editing errors and typos throughout the story.
|I told you before how much I enjoyed "Necromancer." When you told me there was another story coming out that dealt with the characters, setting, and plot of it, I couldn't wait. I wasn't disappointed. Do you write stories other than on this site? Unlike most of the "writers" on here, you really have a knack for story. I'm an aspiring writer myself, and am currently trying to get some of my stories published, so I can really appreciate your talent. Thanks again for sharing.|