Castle adventure

Written by number0 / G: General Audiences /

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Comments & Ratings

Author	Date	Comment
Amonite	Nov 3, 2019	This reads more like a skeletal plot outline than an actual story. Most pages are a single sentence. There is no reason to care about any character, spelling errors (e.g. night instead of knight) make it confusing, the plot is forced by death to be pretty linear. The setting isn't developed, and there is no tension at all. It could have potential if these summaries were turned into an actual story, as a princess fighting to save her kingdom from trolls with the aid of a mysterious knight is an interesting enough premise. Unfortunately, this current story never goes beyond that premise. by Amonite on Nov 3, 2019
number0	Jun 12, 2019	wonderful by number0 on Jun 12, 2019
number0	Jun 12, 2019	It's Great! by number0 on Jun 12, 2019