Silent, but Deadly

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Comments & Ratings

Author	Date	Comment
JohnJohnson	Dec 27, 2005	Well, nice effort. Obviously the war in Iraq is a very hot button issue. I felt the battle scenes could be a little more flushed out. And I didn't really like the fact that I was punished for administering some basic first aid to a fallen comrade. In the end it simply lacked depth. It has nothing to do with style. All in all, this story is better than average. by JohnJohnson on Dec 27, 2005
donteatpoop	Jun 17, 2005	Funny name. Kind of threw off from the potential seriousness of the story. by donteatpoop on Jun 17, 2005
donteatpoop	Jun 7, 2005	Good story. It was enjoyable. But I knew with each room that if i chose one I would automaticaly die and if I chose the other the story would continue. There should be at least a few non death choices in the story. And yes, I know it's a war story. by donteatpoop on Jun 7, 2005
jeffisthebest	Feb 16, 2005	Wow, I'm glad I kept reading till the end, because the start was bad, but it got really good near the end. Good detail! Many people invent stories like this, but you draw the reader and it's like you're there, which is what any story intends to do. Just asking, why did you have it start with a sort-of dream, if that's what it is. by jeffisthebest on Feb 16, 2005