Paradise Violated

Written by EndMaster / R: Restricted - Adult /

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Comments & Ratings

Author	Date	Comment
Zero118	Feb 18, 2021	by Zero118 on Feb 18, 2021
enterpride	Feb 18, 2021	by enterpride on Feb 18, 2021
Wizal	Jan 27, 2021	by Wizal on Jan 27, 2021
antscoff	Dec 10, 2020	by antscoff on Dec 10, 2020
Starbourne	Nov 27, 2020	by Starbourne on Nov 27, 2020
PerforatedPenguin	Nov 22, 2020	by PerforatedPenguin on Nov 22, 2020
Ineffable	Aug 14, 2020	by Ineffable on Aug 14, 2020
Triclops	Jan 15, 2020	by Triclops on Jan 15, 2020
Bucky	Jan 14, 2020	Paradise deserved what it got. by Bucky on Jan 14, 2020
	Jan 13, 2020	by on Jan 13, 2020
TurnipBandit	Nov 22, 2019	by TurnipBandit on Nov 22, 2019
C11302	Nov 21, 2019	by C11302 on Nov 21, 2019
C6H8O6	Nov 21, 2019	by C6H8O6 on Nov 21, 2019
TheChef	Nov 21, 2019	by TheChef on Nov 21, 2019
venyanwarrior	Nov 19, 2019	by venyanwarrior on Nov 19, 2019
mizal	Nov 19, 2019	by mizal on Nov 19, 2019
ninjapitka	Nov 19, 2019	by ninjapitka on Nov 19, 2019
Cricket	Aug 27, 2019	by Cricket on Aug 27, 2019
Madbrad200	May 22, 2014	It seemed good at first but then it just seemed lazy. by Madbrad200 on May 22, 2014
Thickskullman	Jul 13, 2013	by Thickskullman on Jul 13, 2013
Celvis	Aug 18, 2010	by Celvis on Aug 18, 2010
ChubbyTeletubby	Jun 7, 2009	Another gem! I like how you set up the option scheme. Very nice. You know, with the back stories being optional reading. You (the reader) can get as in depth as you want....or not. I'm sure you've done this with a few of your stories. Sci-fi usually isn't my cup of tea, but you did a nice job here. All in all it was pretty original! And that's a hard thing to do with sci-fi. Because it's pretty much all been said and done before. Anyway, great job! You did it! Yay!! Sorry. Also, I've always liked the names of alien races and/or fantasy races you come up with. Also, I think I'm falling in love with you. Shhhhh. Don't say a word. Don't say a word. by ChubbyTeletubby on Jun 7, 2009
zee	Apr 7, 2009	This was one of the random stories pulled up when I discovered this site and the first I read, so EndMaster is directly responsible for getting me addicted. Paradise Violated is very obviously inspired by Warhammer 40k, and even though that's a setting I've never really been able to get into, here I was hooked immediately. (It helps that he provides a good deal of optional background info, that's something I'll have to keep in mind when I post my own work...) An excellent story all around. by zee on Apr 7, 2009
zee	Apr 5, 2009	by zee on Apr 5, 2009
urnam0	Feb 20, 2009	I wasn't expecting such a well developed story but I was wrong. Other than a few lazy endings this was not that far from Ground Zero or Necromancer epicness. I give this a 9. by urnam0 on Feb 20, 2009
TacoNo1	Aug 29, 2008	by TacoNo1 on Aug 29, 2008
scottmah	Jul 30, 2007	by scottmah on Jul 30, 2007
Vesnicie	Jun 8, 2007	This story was a little bit difficult to get into at first, but I'm glad I stayed on-board with it because it became increasingly intriguing the more I read. I really liked your use of background notes to flesh out the story more without burdening the less patient among your readers. I also never realized that my ex-boss was actually a Mazatt. Fascinating! My pet name for him was actually "Napoleonic little bastard", but "Mazatt" is much easier. I like the mix of familiar military and Star Strek-y elements, but in a new and original scenario. I also appreciated some of the chilling parallels to our own current political realities. by Vesnicie on Jun 8, 2007
apotheosis	Feb 5, 2007	Another excellent story End, but the style of writing bothered me. A lot of the language seemed casual... and I much prefer a stiff pretentious style of writing... damn AP English classes have me brainwashed. Anyway, great story, I just had to deduct a point due to the form the narration was delivered in... if that makes any sense... by apotheosis on Feb 5, 2007
donteatpoop	Jan 25, 2007	Loved it, a very primal science fiction. by donteatpoop on Jan 25, 2007
jeffisthebest	Jan 3, 2007	by jeffisthebest on Jan 3, 2007

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