Paradise Violated

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Triclops
Triclops
Jan 15, 2020
by Triclops on Jan 15, 2020
Bucky
Bucky
Jan 14, 2020
Paradise deserved what it got.
by Bucky on Jan 14, 2020
Wildblue
Wildblue
Jan 13, 2020
by Wildblue on Jan 13, 2020
TurnipBandit
TurnipBandit
Nov 22, 2019
by TurnipBandit on Nov 22, 2019
C11302
C11302
Nov 21, 2019
by C11302 on Nov 21, 2019
C6H8O6
C6H8O6
Nov 21, 2019
by C6H8O6 on Nov 21, 2019
TheChef
TheChef
Nov 21, 2019
by TheChef on Nov 21, 2019
venyanwarrior
venyanwarrior
Nov 19, 2019
by venyanwarrior on Nov 19, 2019
mizal
mizal
Nov 19, 2019
by mizal on Nov 19, 2019
ninjapitka
ninjapitka
Nov 19, 2019
by ninjapitka on Nov 19, 2019
Cricket
Cricket
Aug 27, 2019
by Cricket on Aug 27, 2019
Madbrad200
Madbrad200
May 22, 2014
It seemed good at first but then it just seemed lazy.
by Madbrad200 on May 22, 2014
Thickskullman
Thickskullman
Jul 13, 2013
by Thickskullman on Jul 13, 2013
Celvis
Celvis
Aug 18, 2010
by Celvis on Aug 18, 2010
ChubbyTeletubby
ChubbyTeletubby
Jun 7, 2009
Another gem!

I like how you set up the option scheme. Very nice. You know, with the back stories being optional reading. You (the reader) can get as in depth as you want....or not. I'm sure you've done this with a few of your stories.

Sci-fi usually isn't my cup of tea, but you did a nice job here. All in all it was pretty original! And that's a hard thing to do with sci-fi.

Because it's pretty much all been said and done before. Anyway, great job!

You did it! Yay!!

Sorry.

Also, I've always liked the names of alien races and/or fantasy races you come up with.

Also, I think I'm falling in love with you. Shhhhh. Don't say a word.

Don't say a word.
by ChubbyTeletubby on Jun 7, 2009
zee
zee
Apr 7, 2009
This was one of the random stories pulled up when I discovered this site and the first I read, so EndMaster is directly responsible for getting me addicted. Paradise Violated is very obviously inspired by Warhammer 40k, and even though that's a setting I've never really been able to get into, here I was hooked immediately. (It helps that he provides a good deal of optional background info, that's something I'll have to keep in mind when I post my own work...) An excellent story all around.
by zee on Apr 7, 2009
zee
zee
Apr 5, 2009
by zee on Apr 5, 2009
urnam0
urnam0
Feb 20, 2009
I wasn't expecting such a well developed story but I was wrong. Other than a few lazy endings this was not that far from Ground Zero or Necromancer epicness. I give this a 9.
by urnam0 on Feb 20, 2009
TacoNo1
TacoNo1
Aug 29, 2008
by TacoNo1 on Aug 29, 2008
scottmah
scottmah
Jul 30, 2007
by scottmah on Jul 30, 2007
Vesnicie
Vesnicie
Jun 8, 2007
This story was a little bit difficult to get into at first, but I'm glad I stayed on-board with it because it became increasingly intriguing the more I read.

I really liked your use of background notes to flesh out the story more without burdening the less patient among your readers. I also never realized that my ex-boss was actually a Mazatt. Fascinating! My pet name for him was actually "Napoleonic little bastard", but "Mazatt" is much easier.

I like the mix of familiar military and Star Strek-y elements, but in a new and original scenario. I also appreciated some of the chilling parallels to our own current political realities.
by Vesnicie on Jun 8, 2007
apotheosis
apotheosis
Feb 5, 2007
Another excellent story End, but the style of writing bothered me. A lot of the language seemed casual... and I much prefer a stiff pretentious style of writing... damn AP English classes have me brainwashed. Anyway, great story, I just had to deduct a point due to the form the narration was delivered in... if that makes any sense...
by apotheosis on Feb 5, 2007
donteatpoop
donteatpoop
Jan 25, 2007
Loved it, a very primal science fiction.
by donteatpoop on Jan 25, 2007
jeffisthebest
jeffisthebest
Jan 3, 2007
by jeffisthebest on Jan 3, 2007

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