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Hiei Part 2

Written by Venus2352 / PG: Parental Guidance Suggested / 7.57 (7 ratings) (7)
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TheCandyMan
TheCandyMan		 Jun 2, 2011
Great story. I love the plot, storyline and the writing altogether. No flaws, only the fact that there's no paragraph spaces. Damn it I had to skip a few pages because without paragraphs, no spaces to breath in, the writing is just a great big black and white mess!

I then became bored with this, but after the pages I had to skip, came the parts that I needed to read, and it was worth it.
by TheCandyMan on Jun 2, 2011
magic
magic		 Aug 5, 2009
Great job on the romance and sex part, but I think donteatpoop is right, you should have seperate paragraphs.
by magic on Aug 5, 2009
kirara
kirara		 Feb 25, 2009
by kirara on Feb 25, 2009
rendogg
rendogg		 Jul 27, 2007
by rendogg on Jul 27, 2007
jp33
jp33		 Apr 12, 2006
by jp33 on Apr 12, 2006
donteatpoop
donteatpoop		 Sep 13, 2005
by donteatpoop on Sep 13, 2005
LadyLeaMarie
LadyLeaMarie		 Jan 14, 2005
Another great fic. Please keep writing these, they're fun to read!
by LadyLeaMarie on Jan 14, 2005

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