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Mr. E Darveen

Written by Zanic714 / PG: Parental Guidance Suggested / 8.00 (2 ratings) (2)
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Amonite
Amonite		 Nov 3, 2019
This is inventive, which I like. It reads a bit like free-form poetry. The execution is a bit shakier. I like the choices that feel like writing the end of a bit of poetry or prose. I'm not a huge fan of the ones which are more 'what happens next' type plotting and sound clunkier.

As the intro warns, it is easy to get stuck in an endless loop. I think this might be more successful if this didn't happen.

It's a bit surreal, which is interesting, but I think it could be better which crisper endings and smoother execution.
by Amonite on Nov 3, 2019
Scarecrow
Scarecrow		 Dec 12, 2017
Mind numbing, yet so beautiful.
by Scarecrow on Dec 12, 2017

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