Comments & Ratings
||May 15, 2013||Nice and self-contained.|
||May 11, 2011||7/10 because it was very well written, I don't understand planes though. Haha. And plus, the rooms kept looping over and over. Like if I go in for a dive, I basically start over again. :S But it's a great story. Short, but I understand why.|
||Jun 27, 2007||Not much of a story, but very good action. Also, I liked that you finished it. Short and sweet.|
||Aug 28, 2006|
||Dec 3, 2004||
OK.. quite a few things to say. First off, good story with good action and a typically boring idea that is made interesting. One flaw I could find was that, when someone has to choose the next part, it said a whole lot of stuff that I had no idea what the things were and all the directions.|
You made a common newbie error. You made too many choices in alot of rooms which causes you to run out of ideas, bores the reader, and makes you write a WHOLE lot of rooms.
||Nov 30, 2004||
Nice job, great detail and I love the Snoopy allusion ;)|
I also appriecate the lenth of the story, and how it still wraps up nicely in the end. Write on!