Dogfight

Written by AlphaDog / NR: Not Rated / 7.83 (6 ratings) (6)
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Thickskullman
Thickskullman		 May 15, 2013
Nice and self-contained.
by Thickskullman on May 15, 2013
TheCandyMan
TheCandyMan		 May 11, 2011
7/10 because it was very well written, I don't understand planes though. Haha. And plus, the rooms kept looping over and over. Like if I go in for a dive, I basically start over again. :S But it's a great story. Short, but I understand why.
by TheCandyMan on May 11, 2011
apotheosis
apotheosis		 Jun 27, 2007
Not much of a story, but very good action. Also, I liked that you finished it. Short and sweet.
by apotheosis on Jun 27, 2007
Chickenman
Chickenman		 Aug 28, 2006
by Chickenman on Aug 28, 2006
jeffisthebest
jeffisthebest		 Dec 3, 2004
OK.. quite a few things to say. First off, good story with good action and a typically boring idea that is made interesting. One flaw I could find was that, when someone has to choose the next part, it said a whole lot of stuff that I had no idea what the things were and all the directions.

You made a common newbie error. You made too many choices in alot of rooms which causes you to run out of ideas, bores the reader, and makes you write a WHOLE lot of rooms.

Good job!
by jeffisthebest on Dec 3, 2004
trumpetfalcon
trumpetfalcon		 Nov 30, 2004
Nice job, great detail and I love the Snoopy allusion ;)

I also appriecate the lenth of the story, and how it still wraps up nicely in the end. Write on!
by trumpetfalcon on Nov 30, 2004

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