Yale, Yes or No?

Written by Ryhaz10 / G: General Audiences / 4.33 (3 ratings) (3)
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n0mn0m
n0mn0m		 Aug 12, 2021
At some point, my friend "Jake Stater" turned into "Peter"?! And the story is sort of…well, boring. I like high/middle school stories and I've tried to write them, so I understand somewhat that they're hard to write. Maybe try for more details about the reader's surroundings and characters?
by n0mn0m on Aug 12, 2021
Manfart
Manfart		 Jun 10, 2016
by Manfart on Jun 10, 2016
mizal
mizal		 Apr 25, 2016
Not a lot of content here, and what there is has so many typos, punctuation errors and misspellings. Lots of issues in the first page alone. Most pages are just a couple of lines, and the first is just a big fat paragraph that could really stand to be broken up for the dialogue and such. The story itself may have potential, though it's hard to say until some more plot elements or more about the characters are worked in, it's all pretty bland at the moment.
by mizal on Apr 25, 2016

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