How Many Men Would Survive?

Written by AdventureMaker4444 / NR: Not Rated / 6.00 (2 ratings) (2)
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bardoor44444
bardoor44444		 Jan 20, 2021
This is the best story I
by bardoor44444 on Jan 20, 2021
mizal
mizal		 Apr 25, 2016
The first page:
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You wake up to your king calling out to you
"Dan rally up your men we are going to be attacked soon"
"Ok"
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Er...gripping drama and adventure this is not. And it just goes on like this. I'm sure the author has a very cool, epic story going on in their head, but they're not bothering to communicate it at all. Slow down a little, add some detail and for the love of God do some proofreading.
by mizal on Apr 25, 2016

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