Fired!

Written by whiteballs / MA: Mature Audiences - Adult / 8.33 (3 ratings) (3)
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donteatpoop
donteatpoop		 Mar 27, 2014
Porn. Not knocking you for that. It was well written enough... But it was really just porn. Not even believable porn, or porn with a decent storyline. Just porn... And not very descriptive porn at that. I'm not sure I agree with the comments on how detailed this is, and I struggled to find all of the 'vocabulary' that was hinted at.

Still though, far from the worst thing on here. Needs a lot more details and description to take it up a notch.
by donteatpoop on Mar 27, 2014
sedna
sedna		 Feb 9, 2014
setting is detailed
by sedna on Feb 9, 2014
dnextreme88
dnextreme88		 Jan 28, 2014
Very detailed and uses a lot of vocabulary. It just needs more expanding.
by dnextreme88 on Jan 28, 2014

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