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Hey not bad overall. You do need to work on your general style, but you were still able to draw me in nonetheless.
by ChubbyTeletubby on Dec 22, 2005
jumps from "I" to "You" randomly. Otherwise an enjoyable read with moral decisions rather than action choices, which was a nice break from the norm.
by donteatpoop on May 26, 2005
This story truly pulls you in with its expert writing style. Id be happy to partner up with you for a story.
by jeffisthebest on Nov 5, 2004

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