The Black Citadel

Written by funkymango / R: Restricted - Adult /

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Comments & Ratings

Author	Date	Comment
FireGolem	Nov 26, 2014	by FireGolem on Nov 26, 2014
Crefix	Nov 30, 2010	by Crefix on Nov 30, 2010
titus337	Nov 9, 2010	nicely done! by titus337 on Nov 9, 2010
Celvis	Aug 20, 2010	This story pulled me into it more than any other one so far. (Is it magic?) by Celvis on Aug 20, 2010
michelle1994	Jan 27, 2010	WOW!! I really love your story. Your awesome!! by michelle1994 on Jan 27, 2010
veggieveggie	Nov 8, 2009	by veggieveggie on Nov 8, 2009
Thiefswipe	Jan 6, 2008	Wow! It can get hard to find to find your way through the halls, but other than that, A great story! by Thiefswipe on Jan 6, 2008
Eichel	Dec 12, 2007	by Eichel on Dec 12, 2007
EndMaster	Jan 3, 2007	Really good, and you beat Legend in getting it completed! Of course you did have a head start! by EndMaster on Jan 3, 2007
Dan2	Oct 8, 2006	Great story. Mana is sort of hard to understand and could use a bit more detail. Other than that, it's really well done. by Dan2 on Oct 8, 2006
apotheosis	Jul 3, 2006	Nicely done. by apotheosis on Jul 3, 2006
dnukem	Apr 27, 2006	very good story the mana potion part is a bit hard to understand. But other than that very well written. by dnukem on Apr 27, 2006
YazZMaN	Dec 30, 2005	True, true. A lot of work <I>did</i> go into this story. And better yet-- it's finished. I gave it an 8 though because it lacks good detail and (call me picky) it didn't seem... proffesional. For stories of this kind, I like to see pictures in every room... maybe even music sometimes. And I know that dude in the hut was inspired by Hagrid from Harry Potter. Lmao, very good story though. by YazZMaN on Dec 30, 2005
donteatpoop	Dec 10, 2005	Wow. You put a lot of work into this story and it shows. Excellent read. I don't do the dice books, so I just cheated on those parts, but the storylne itself was exciting. Throughout the story there was a definate sense of adventure. This is a well diserved ten for you, Funky. Great job. by donteatpoop on Dec 10, 2005
jeffisthebest	Dec 2, 2005	Well, dont rate yourself...but this must've taken so much work. You get a 10. by jeffisthebest on Dec 2, 2005
JohnJohnson	Dec 1, 2005	Not even my style of story. It gets a 10 because of the work involved, and also for the fact that it's well-written. by JohnJohnson on Dec 1, 2005
Morathi	Apr 25, 2005	It's detailed, it's well thought out, and it's fun to play. Good job. This site could use more stories like this. by Morathi on Apr 25, 2005
michaelrayholt	Apr 18, 2005	I WAS going to give this a 9 because of your excellent writing on the story, but good night Almighty, you gave YOURSELF a 10?!? That's dirty pool, my friend. (Not to mention I've tried it before and it didn't work, so I'm just a tad jealous.) Keep up the good work, though! by michaelrayholt on Apr 18, 2005
Nuquerna	Jan 18, 2005	Great story! I like the many obstacles and fights, the dice rolls and the equipment list. Maybe the character lacks some personality (we don't get to know what he thinks/feels/likes/dislikes/etc), but otherwise this is a fun CYOA-story and I can't wait for it to be 'finished'! p.s. did you rate your own story? :P by Nuquerna on Jan 18, 2005
Cab	Jan 17, 2005	by Cab on Jan 17, 2005
funkymango	Dec 15, 2004	by funkymango on Dec 15, 2004
JudgeWall	Dec 15, 2004	At last! This story reminds me of the "Golden Dragon Series" from the mid 80s, a classic. Everyone would do themselves a favor by reading your story, and see some of the greater potentional of the CYOA Website. I'll look forward to reading more of your stories! by JudgeWall on Dec 15, 2004

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