Inu Yasha

Written by Venus2352 / PG: Parental Guidance Suggested /

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Comments & Ratings

Author	Rating	Date	Comment
bigblotbob		Feb 15, 2007	by bigblotbob on Feb 15, 2007
apotheosis		Feb 6, 2007	Simply put, this is terrible. by apotheosis on Feb 6, 2007
donteatpoop		Aug 18, 2005	I wish I had something posative to say........................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................... but I don't. by donteatpoop on Aug 18, 2005
zigzag123391		Feb 9, 2005	It was ok by zigzag123391 on Feb 9, 2005
DMOC		Jan 28, 2005	I really couldn't give this story a high rating. You keep saying different tenses (past, present). Also, the thing that really bugs me is the dialogue. You're supposed to make a new paragraph everytime a new person speaks. There are so many people talking in one room, that I find it hard to tell who's doing the talking. Also, there's a possibility of reading over 33 rooms...DON'T make stories THAT long, no one likes that. But otherwise, I guess it's average... by DMOC on Jan 28, 2005
metabad		Jan 14, 2005	it's an ok story, but you seem to have Keykio and Kugomei mixxed up by metabad on Jan 14, 2005
LadyLeaMarie		Jan 14, 2005	Cute story. I'm sad that Kagome had to die though. 'Course it could've screwed up the ending if she'd be brought back to life. by LadyLeaMarie on Jan 14, 2005
Snoopy		Nov 2, 2004	OK. This needs some work. Inuyasha is ONE word, and it's "Blades of Blood" not "Claws of Blood". Also, your verbs are messed up. You're switching from past to present tense, and it makes the story hard to follow. I think that this story needs a major update. No offense, but I really don't think you put a lot of heart into this. I mean, you can even see it in some of the choices. You can't be so blunt. Add a little mystery to your words, don't just throw them out there. It causes the readers to lose interest. Play with it a little. Like, just when a reader thinks a certain thing is going to happen, turn it around, so that it's the complete opposite of what was expected. It might be easier just to slap a story together, but that doesn't always make it the best choice. You want people to enjoy your story. Don't just write something down and be done with it, because people can see right through that. If your heart's not in your work, then there's no point in writing. If you don't love what you write then go back to the drawing board. Don't just say,"OK I guess this is just one of my 'blah' pages." No, you can't do that. Especially when you're dealing with something as exciting as Inuyasha. Make each page dynamic. Set a standard for your writing. If you don't feel that it's your best, then don't post it on the site. It's as simple as that. Just get it together. by Snoopy on Nov 2, 2004
Venus2352		May 22, 2004	This is a really good story and I hope everyone else thinks so by Venus2352 on May 22, 2004