Storm

It was quite hard to unerstand, with quite a few Spelling mistakes, and loss of punctuation.
All these things, need improving!

For a first story, it's very good!
Here are some tips..

Oh jesus christ, Please do better on you're next story.I could make this, if it was comeing out my backside. Most choice's and part's of the storie, didn't even make sense.

Jesus Christ! Homer This Is a Desgrace!

I Can't Belive It!MAKE YOUR NEXT STORY BETTER!

Wow what choices What great Pleaser
What great Sex !HE HE HE Your a really great story maker ha ha i liked that Especialy da bit where you acidentally hit the guy in da nose!
Maybe we should write a story togheter cause on my The Rockin Squad Clan ive also made a humor story with only one Sex ending!!!-SEND MESSAGE BACK TO ME-

It is really good and i reaaly like the jason movies so you've created an jason book!!!

Wow that was good i dont think i need to see the oher storys i am goinin the clan calld WERE NUMBER1 and i give them a nine

That was great and scary it was cool how you got that tune in the first page and was it from the film called HALLOWEN cause i really like tha song so i give it ten!

YHEA oh man this one is so funny i mean nobody can think this sort of stuff up these days wow its so cool good one!!!