ZavuSilverlight

Reading this was painful.

'You go back to sleep but you never wake up again. No one ever found the cause to your death.'

Was a bit....crap :/
I realise your first language isn't English and that it's all mildly translated and I for one have no problem with that, however, it lacks a certain draw factor in it. I read it and can't wait till I see 'The End' just so I can leave the story and start bitching about it. You also voted yours with a 10, so that sucks alot.

Was a bit...random. I mean, random can be good sometimes but it was clique random. 'on the way to school you find a black box', *enter bad-storyline*

At first I thought it was silly, but after reading through it, I thought the reward system (the deeds) was brilliant. Well done you.

I thought that was amazing, the description of Fred is orgasmic (Fred the world, not Fred himself). It was a very unique and interesting story and I hope you could create another one like it.

*thums up* it's both a mixture of Austin Powers aaaand...KAG's wit

Escritura de Niza, estoy alegre ver escrituras internacionales en este sitio.

F*cking brilliant, one of the funniest stories on here. I think your under-rated because it's not greatly known. Start posting on the forums a bit.

Gets a 7 for creativity, I think this is the first of it's kind...ish. You also need to make the humour come mor naturally, your trying to hard to make people laugh.

I thought the story was boring. The first 8-10 rooms it's just you in a f*cking line. Plus you piss me off by voting your stories 10 all the time.

Not bad, improve grammar and I think it will do well.

I like the historical date. I love reading about the ancients, bravo homer.

I liked the use of money and experience etc. This was good even if it wasn't a slight rip off of Faridell(who'd ya rip that off then Fc huh.. :) ). The only downside is it's too much to write down if the story doesn't draw you in straight away. I read the first few bits and when it got to writing all that down, I thought forget it. Still it's your first story and I still congratulate you for converting an RPG into a CYOA.

Verbal Diarrhea.
Are you aware?

You get a three because of this room.

You go and slit their throats as well.
Well done. You friggin rule.

Room created by grayscavenger on Mar 17, 2004 04:10
Levels Deep: 5 | ID: 12911
Choose:
Go celebrate your victory.
Burn their bodies.

I liked how you portrayed sonic...oh wait..what story is this?

'Lizzi Walkes downstaires in her own house'
Classic line.

This would be a good story, 'cept it's InuYasha, so it's not.

Are there even homosexuals in Digimon?

As said^^, make it a CYOA

I particularly enjoyed the description.

Rape her IRC?! How the F*ck do I do that!

Not too bad, the illustrations help it.

Later on this will evolve into the recycle bin.

Killing people with paper clips?! What Am I rambo, poo off.

You need to be lobotomized

It was a good idea, but you bundle too much info into one sentence without using commas.

It puts wrestling to shame. Plus wrestlers are hit with chairs all the time. One hit doesn't make them retire.

Noice.

Was alright.

I bow to this. Not only do your write good room descs. but you use a vast array pictures as well. I tried using pictures alot but it didn't go too well. I also like this as it's an army story and the best one iv'e found on here.

I like the way in which you leave it up to us to completely change the story rather than giving us small minor options like ...i do :/

I felt kinda sorry for you on negative reviews. However I respect you in the fact that you have single handedly created something which people seem to hate buuuut has gained alot of votes. You are saluted and honourably discharged.

I SPIT at this. No I don't really, but it fails in plot wise.

Completely diffrent from anything done before, Kudos!

It's like a CYOA fantasy book, where did I put all of them bastads.

Sheer brilliance. Kudos to you.

I like randomness. I also like J-lo giving me a blow job till I blow.

I didn't give it a 10 because sometimes it lacks in quality. But the overall deepness is amazing. Gets a good rating because quantity does count for something.

Kudos. Unfortunately my first experience lead me to sucking evil doctor co*k, I'll try again.

To the bloke who said 'omg i cant belive this f00l, dnt ur know how to loop'. Check the date this story was started,long before looping or graphics where allowed to be implemented. I also can't be bovvad (hmm,chav scum) to now change it just so you have an easier time and don't have to move your hand slightly up,slightly left and press back.