AGuy27

A humor story done right. So many people on this website think that being random equals a funny story. This story actually makes an interesting but realistic situation, and making Chloe suffer is actually kind of funny. Two issues I do have with this story are that the descriptions feel out of place and the number of loose ends. I would recommend giving this story a read, it made me chuckle a few times.

I was going to wait for a while to write a review for this, but right now it's pretty obvious what I will write this story.
The story itself is okay, maybe a 4/10. So why did I rate it as 1 star? Well, the owner of the story gave it a false 10/10 to boost ratings. Really? That's desperate. Didn't even try to hide it with an alt or anything, just flat out made a fake comment. And this story isn't even being always expanded. It hasn't been expanded since the 11th, but 2 days ago the owner made the fake comment. So I can't even give the owner the excuse of not being active. They are active, they just don't care enough to write the story.

This isn't humor. This is just a bad and confusing story. The "run into a wall" options are completely useless, and falling into a spike trap for ordering veggies doesn't make any sense.

This story’s biggest problem is the “Sudden Death” Trope, where you instantly die at just one choice. While it could be worse, it certainly doesn’t make the story better. Why does your wife shoot you if you say hi? And why am I running away in the first place? This story would probably be a lot better with more effort.

The story is pretty much the same no matter what you do. It’s also incredibly short. And getting sentenced to 3 years for honesty? What? This story is not good, but the grammar is decent and it isn’t cringeworthy, so it gets 3/10.

To say this is bad is like saying it would be somewhat annoying if the world exploded. This story is a disaster. It's over way too quickly, the grammar is terrible, there's no effort, I don't even know who anyone in the story is, and the endings make no sense what so ever.
If you put in a tiny amount of effort, this would be a lot better. One thing you actually did right is not have a bunch of loose ends, but that's not a surprise seeing how small the story is and how low effort the story is.