RishiAmador

This was entertaining for a few minutes. Would like to have seen more rooms, though.

This would be great if it didn't have so many loose ends!
I'm not the kind to contribute to a story- I'm not creative enough to carry on someone else's idea.
But please, find time to work on this!

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monty python
too much of it

I'd really like it if this story had a little less loose ends.

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Woohoo! Can't believe I didn't screw it up.
Really fun story. Make one for a girl maybe?

Come on, come on, come on! This story has some good potential, but too many loose ends! I'm anxious to read more.