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Sir Osis by Cricket Oct 31, 2019
Didn't realize this was posted here.

Now you've went and won the Lords of the Land Contest twice.
This could be better. Although its not bad you could still go through and fix some of the spelling errors. Such as "safty" as opposed to safety, and "except" which should be accept.
Too many spelling and grammatical errors. Only skimmed a couple pages but the errors are very easy to see if you would comb through the story for a little bit.