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the way of splap

Written by splapped / NR: Not Rated / 5.20 (5 ratings) (5)
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Author Rating Date Comment
apotheosis
apotheosis		 Nov 26, 2006
Decent premise but needs a lot of work. While I like the Deeds idea you need effort behind it.
by apotheosis on Nov 26, 2006
Dan2
Dan2		 Oct 2, 2006
Cool
by Dan2 on Oct 2, 2006
jeffisthebest
jeffisthebest		 Apr 24, 2005
I agree more with Morathi. Fix it up and it will be good.
by jeffisthebest on Apr 24, 2005
ZavuSilverlight
ZavuSilverlight		 Apr 23, 2005
At first I thought it was silly, but after reading through it, I thought the reward system (the deeds) was brilliant. Well done you.
by ZavuSilverlight on Apr 23, 2005
Morathi
Morathi		 Apr 23, 2005
Kind of a harsh rating, but there's not too much detail in the story and there's no capitalization. It doesn't seem all that thought out, and I don't really see a point to it. Maybe try again with a plan in mind for where the story is going. Also, make the responses funnier. I get that your goal in the story is to annoy people, but if you yell out 'whoo hoo, sex' when the teacher starts on the reproductive system, you'll propably get more than a dirty look.
by Morathi on Apr 23, 2005

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