Comments & Ratings
|This story pulled me into it more than any other one so far. (Is it magic?)|
|WOW!! I really love your story. Your awesome!!|
|Wow! It can get hard to find to find your way through the halls, but other than that, A great story!|
|Really good, and you beat Legend in getting it completed! Of course you did have a head start!|
|Great story. Mana is sort of hard to understand and could use a bit more detail. Other than that, it's really well done.|
|very good story the mana potion part is a bit hard to understand. But other than that very well written.|
True, true. A lot of work <I>did</i> go into this story. And better yet-- it's finished. I gave it an 8 though because it lacks good detail and (call me picky) it didn't seem... proffesional. For stories of this kind, I like to see pictures in every room... maybe even music sometimes.|
And I know that dude in the hut was inspired by Hagrid from Harry Potter. Lmao, very good story though.
|Wow. You put a lot of work into this story and it shows. Excellent read. I don't do the dice books, so I just cheated on those parts, but the storylne itself was exciting. Throughout the story there was a definate sense of adventure. This is a well diserved ten for you, Funky. Great job.|
|Well, dont rate yourself...but this must've taken so much work. You get a 10.|
|Not even my style of story. It gets a 10 because of the work involved, and also for the fact that it's well-written.|
|It's detailed, it's well thought out, and it's fun to play. Good job. This site could use more stories like this.|
I WAS going to give this a 9 because of your excellent writing on the story, but good night Almighty, you gave YOURSELF a 10?!? That's dirty pool, my friend.|
(Not to mention I've tried it before and it didn't work, so I'm just a tad jealous.)
Keep up the good work, though!
Great story! I like the many obstacles and fights, the dice rolls and the equipment list. Maybe the character lacks some personality (we don't get to know what he thinks/feels/likes/dislikes/etc), but otherwise this is a fun CYOA-story and I can't wait for it to be 'finished'!|
p.s. did you rate your own story? :P
This story reminds me of the "Golden Dragon Series" from the mid 80s, a classic.
Everyone would do themselves a favor by reading your story, and see some of the greater potentional of the CYOA Website.
I'll look forward to reading more of your stories!