The Black Citadel

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by FireGolem on Nov 26, 2014
by Crefix on Nov 30, 2010
nicely done!
by titus337 on Nov 9, 2010
This story pulled me into it more than any other one so far. (Is it magic?)
by Celvis on Aug 20, 2010
WOW!! I really love your story. Your awesome!!
by michelle1994 on Jan 27, 2010
by veggieveggie on Nov 8, 2009
Wow! It can get hard to find to find your way through the halls, but other than that, A great story!
by Thiefswipe on Jan 6, 2008
by Eichel on Dec 12, 2007
Really good, and you beat Legend in getting it completed! Of course you did have a head start!
by EndMaster on Jan 3, 2007
Great story. Mana is sort of hard to understand and could use a bit more detail. Other than that, it's really well done.
by Dan2 on Oct 8, 2006
Nicely done.
by apotheosis on Jul 3, 2006
very good story the mana potion part is a bit hard to understand. But other than that very well written.
by dnukem on Apr 27, 2006
True, true. A lot of work <I>did</i> go into this story. And better yet-- it's finished. I gave it an 8 though because it lacks good detail and (call me picky) it didn't seem... proffesional. For stories of this kind, I like to see pictures in every room... maybe even music sometimes.

And I know that dude in the hut was inspired by Hagrid from Harry Potter. Lmao, very good story though.
by YazZMaN on Dec 30, 2005
Wow. You put a lot of work into this story and it shows. Excellent read. I don't do the dice books, so I just cheated on those parts, but the storylne itself was exciting. Throughout the story there was a definate sense of adventure. This is a well diserved ten for you, Funky. Great job.
by donteatpoop on Dec 10, 2005
Well, dont rate yourself...but this must've taken so much work. You get a 10.
by jeffisthebest on Dec 2, 2005
Not even my style of story. It gets a 10 because of the work involved, and also for the fact that it's well-written.
by JohnJohnson on Dec 1, 2005
It's detailed, it's well thought out, and it's fun to play. Good job. This site could use more stories like this.
by Morathi on Apr 25, 2005
I WAS going to give this a 9 because of your excellent writing on the story, but good night Almighty, you gave YOURSELF a 10?!? That's dirty pool, my friend.

(Not to mention I've tried it before and it didn't work, so I'm just a tad jealous.)

Keep up the good work, though!
by michaelrayholt on Apr 18, 2005
Great story! I like the many obstacles and fights, the dice rolls and the equipment list. Maybe the character lacks some personality (we don't get to know what he thinks/feels/likes/dislikes/etc), but otherwise this is a fun CYOA-story and I can't wait for it to be 'finished'!

p.s. did you rate your own story? :P
by Nuquerna on Jan 18, 2005
by Cab on Jan 17, 2005
by funkymango on Dec 15, 2004
At last!

This story reminds me of the "Golden Dragon Series" from the mid 80s, a classic.

Everyone would do themselves a favor by reading your story, and see some of the greater potentional of the CYOA Website.

I'll look forward to reading more of your stories!
by JudgeWall on Dec 15, 2004

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