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I liked it alot. The prose is good. Especially on the last page in the 'route' I took. The one with the sunset by the Moses. The general mood of despair and hopelessness and the rampant corruption adds to the hellishness. Reminded me of India at times.

Brilliant! I liked how you mentioned India. This is a rather fine example of Wodehousean humour. Definitely a 10.

crap crap crap

reading this story is like square-dancing with a nail studded dildo up your ass

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round and round we get around WOOHOO!!! we get AROUND!!!!!

Engrossing and different story.

Nice work.;)