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Ok, but very short and too many duplicate pages.
by Thickskullman on May 18, 2013
A lot of fun. How about a sequel?
by Clark on Mar 7, 2013
Unfortunately I'm so busy I could only read about 5 or 6 rooms, but it looks really good so far. There weren't many spelling errors and you kept the story going at a good pace.

I'd recommend breaking up your writing into paragraphs (just hit "enter" twice) and shortening down the words included in the choice links, but this is good stuff.
by YazZMaN on Apr 19, 2010

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