J. Cross, Manager

Written by Serj22 / R: Restricted - Adult /

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Comments & Ratings

Author	Rating	Date	Comment
ChubbyTeletubby		Nov 2, 2007	What she said. Pretty clever at times. by ChubbyTeletubby on Nov 2, 2007
Vesnicie		Nov 1, 2007	This story started out with some engaging quirkiness (I loved the part about the drunk-kitten alarm clock) and showed signs of effort from the start, however I feel it unraveled a bit as it progressed. Spelling became a lot sloppier, suggesting that you were rushing your way through. Also, the plot took a long time to get off the ground and there wasn't always enough explanation for why one room-end option might be more desirable than another. You're obviously a capable writer. I'd just like to see your talents more fully utilized the next time around. by Vesnicie on Nov 1, 2007