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Mysterious Wonder

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Author Rating Date Comment
Thickskullman
Thickskullman
Jun 8, 2013
by Thickskullman on Jun 8, 2013
Leblanc4prez
Leblanc4prez
Jun 19, 2007
I am the Queen of France!
by Leblanc4prez on Jun 19, 2007
jeffisthebest
jeffisthebest
Dec 20, 2006
I liked it, well-written and with some good choices, although many were perhaps overly mundane.

It was a good idea.
by jeffisthebest on Dec 20, 2006
apotheosis
apotheosis
Dec 11, 2006
First and foremost I must state a fatal flaw within your story: It branches off far to quickly and I think you will have a difficult time making it self contained.

You have the beginnings of a very good story but unless you start merging many plotlines together fast it is going to branch off to quickly for you to ever finish. That said, I thought your writing style was good, not to much description, not to little, it was a good light popcorn reading. It was semi-original, and I can tell that there was certainly effort put into it. Unfortunately, it looks like it hasn't been added to for a few weeks and may be one of those abandon projects. Overall, I rate it a 7, decent but lacks potential for a good finished product.
by apotheosis on Dec 11, 2006
Wick
Wick
Nov 22, 2006
Amazing!
by Wick on Nov 22, 2006

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