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Written by jspten / G: General Audiences / 6.00 (2 ratings) (2)
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donteatpoop
donteatpoop		 May 19, 2012
OK, so starting out in the middle of the action isn't a bad thing, as long as you explain things as the story goes on... Which you failed to do.

Also, I'm not sure which grade of English you're in, but sentences begin with capital letters.
by donteatpoop on May 19, 2012
jspten
jspten		 May 16, 2012
Great
by jspten on May 16, 2012

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