Comments & Ratings
|This is without a doubt the best story I've read on the site so far. I gave it a nine because someone might make a better story one day, but for now, this is the best story I've read. I think I've pieced pretty much the whole story together.|
|Wow..I've nearly managed to uncover what's happened. Truly amazing. There's this 'I need to know what's going on! Why was Bill pointing his gun at me?' Thought flooding my brain, forcing me to click through what I think I don't know and look through this guy's memories..|
|Absolutely wonderful, in every way.One of maybe three stories where i have actually bonded with the characters and felt true wonder as I read. There should be more story's of this quality in the world.|
|Wonderful. I can't say anything else.|
|I read this story years ago, forgot to rate it. The best story I've read on this site. 10/10.|
|I've read through everything, I think, and am still confused by what's going on - but that only makes the story better, I think. You did a great job on this!|
|i like where the story is going but i could piece some things together at the end. if anyone could help me send me a PM please.|
|Wow this story is pretty good!!! Took awhile and it is very interesting, I like it very much|
|Wow. I think I got the story and It's AWESOME! :D|
I had been avoiding this one for awhile out of sheer intimidation. I'm glad I finally got around to it.|
My usual gripe would be to beef up the narrative more, but I understand this would be inappropriate in a "fragmented" story such as this one.
What the story lacks in purely literary merits is made up for in complex orchestration and a very successful use of the CYOA format for "The Memento Factor".
|Woah... This is with out a doubt the best Sci-Fi story on this site. I love things that make all three of my brains tingle with confusion and thought. God dam I love you!|
|An utterly bizarre flawed masterpiece.|
|A good story having to do with advanced theoretical quantum physics and a puzzle all in one! A 10 for sure.|
|This is by far the most brilliant story I've read on this site, hands down.|
|This is a very well written story. Very confusing but you wrote in the beginning that it was supposed to be that way.|
A brilliant idea with poor execution is a scourge. The reader of this story will always be thinking the exposition could be more fluid, the narratives clearer, and the descriptions ARE allowed to make sense and be cumulative, even in a Sci-Fi memory/time travel story. This is like a succulent filet mignon with all the trimmings served in a dirty dog dish.|
|I think I get it! I really think I get it! Very good story--very tricky too. Initially, I was completely confused and ready to give up, but then something clicked and I began to start putting the pieces together. Anyway, I have to say, you are brilliant, dude.|
|I don't know how I missed this story before. Very original. A little TOO fragmented, in my opinion, but I can't bring myself to dock you a point for that.|
|Very well written. Nice job.|
I think when you end the story, you should include a summary for the confused reader. Just to tie down any loose ends.|
Confusing or not, this was an awesome story.
|This is quite simply the best story on this site. It is very confusing, and intentionally so. I'm a fan of the time travel sub-genre of scifi and this story is professional quality. Good job!|
|Good story that works well with the format. It got a little confusing though--you really need to be careful and read every single entry, which ended forcing me to struggle to remember what I'd selected and what I hadn't. I think if the story had been spelled out just a little bit more, my own personal feelings of frustration would have been lessened.|
|I don't know how you thought of this while you were half-sleeping, but its good, very good.|
|Excellent use of cyoa format, really captures the first person pov of an amnesiac.|
Well done! Excellent use of the online format to allow the reader to experience the disorientation of the unfortunate protagonist. Very disturbing without being graphic.|
The best story on this site that I've read.
|Dude, holy shit... very nice idea, incredible writing, and the story is just so fun... This IS the best story on the site I have read so far (and I have read many). This reminds of several movies I have seen. The only flaw was that there wasn't 'quite' so much gameplay as I had hoped for.|
|Seriously, this person is one of the best storytellers I have ever encountered. What a mind job.....|
|Very interesting story|
All I can say is "Wow!" |
That was a very cool story. It took some doing, but I think I managed to piece it all together.