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Dark Secrets

Written by shuttlesworth50 / PG: Parental Guidance Suggested /

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Comments & Ratings

Author	Rating	Date	Comment
KingMalice		May 9, 2010	great story can't wait til you finish it by KingMalice on May 9, 2010
molly1990		May 12, 2009	by molly1990 on May 12, 2009
Calen		Jan 21, 2009	I'm very interested in this story. Hoping you will continue it soon. :) Great work, as I've seen from the comments you have improved the original drastically. by Calen on Jan 21, 2009
meteomage		Nov 30, 2008	this is a lot better than many of the stories on this site. by meteomage on Nov 30, 2008
Natasha		Nov 28, 2008	by Natasha on Nov 28, 2008
Jiggaman		May 8, 2007	The writer has created a very lush and horrific environment that you are guided through at a break-neck pace. The characters are very real, and the settings are detailed and all too believable. This story is mind candy for any reader! by Jiggaman on May 8, 2007
Jiggaman		May 8, 2007	by Jiggaman on May 8, 2007
apotheosis		Dec 4, 2006	It was a decent story that was coherent and easy to understand. More effort could have been put into the writing and it was unfinished. Had you tied up the plot I probably would've given it an 8, maybe even a 9. Decent job. by apotheosis on Dec 4, 2006
michaelrayholt		Aug 5, 2005	I took the same path as they did, but I think it was well-written (I can't recall any spelling errors). Though it was trite and a bit on the vague side (as poop said), I think it would be difficult not to give something a 9 that held my attention for more than 5 rooms (a rare happenstance). by michaelrayholt on Aug 5, 2005
ChubbyTeletubby		Jul 21, 2005	I must have taken a different path than DEP or Homer, because I thought this was a very entertaining story. And as far as formatting goes, I think you did find. A couple parts even made me chuckle. Look forward to seeing it finished. Maybe you should keep throwing in some of those 'comic-relief' moments, which helps offset all the action - which this story doesn't lack! All in all, well done! by ChubbyTeletubby on Jul 21, 2005
donteatpoop		Jun 15, 2005	I'd say a five is an accurate score. Story has a good idea and the writing isn't bad, but it can be hard to read without any seperation between paragraphs. Also could use a little more description, like there was a boat in the house if you take the secret entrance. I had no idea there was even water and I was presented with the choice of driving away in the boat. by donteatpoop on Jun 15, 2005
jeffisthebest		Sep 14, 2004	pretty good by jeffisthebest on Sep 14, 2004